Whether employees deserve a raise.

Part II
You may use your Business Writer’s Handbook, your notes or your textbook, Essentials of Business Communication, 11e. Recommendation: Use a maximum of 50 minutes. You are timed for 60 minutes.
Directions: Each of the following sentences, 1 – 6, have one error. Underline the error and write the correct word in the following textbox.

1. All administrative assistants were asked to work the next four Saturday’s. (2 points)
   Type the correct noun form here:
2. Just between you and I, do you know who the new manager will be? (2 points)
   Type the correct pronoun here:
3. Everyone agrees that us employees deserve a raise. (2 points)
   Type the correct pronoun here:
4. Neither of the two contracts were approved by our client. (2 points)
   Type the correct verb here:
5. Blogs have became an important marketing tool for many companies. (2 points)
   Type the correct verb form here:
6. San Francisco is more close to Hawaii than Los Angeles is. (2 points)
   Type the correct adverb(s) here:
7. Place commas where necessary in the following sentence:
   Although tired employees preferred the evening not the morning in-service training programs. (3 points)
   Place commas in the following sentence where needed:
   Although tired employees preferred the evening not the morning in-service training programs.
8. Revise the following sentence to express the idea using the "you" view:
   All applicants must complete the attached form by December 1. (3 points)
   Type your revised sentence here:
9. Revise the following sentence to use positive language:
   Because you neglected to include a copy of your cash register receipt, we can’t process your rebate. (3 points)
   Type your revised sentence here:
10. Revise the following sentence to use bias-free language:
    Every manager must review his employees annually. (3 points)
    Type your revised sentence here:
11. Revise the following sentence to avoid misplaced modifiers:
    Waiting for the interview, sweat formed on Richard. (3 points)
    Type your revised sentence here:
12. Revise the following sentence to demonstrate direct, concise language:
    This is to inform you that due to the fact that health care costs are rising, there is a new employee wellness program that will be offered starting on November 1. (3 points)
    Type your revised sentence here:
13. Revise the following sentence to avoid trite business phrases:
    Pursuant to your request, enclosed please find a copy of our current catalog. (3 points)
    Type your revised sentence here:
14. Write one improved opening sentence for the following adjustment letter responding to a claim. (5 points)
    We are extremely saddened to learn of the unfortunate failure of your TravelerXtra smartphone, and we apologize for any inconvenience it has caused you. Although company policy typically prevents us from offering a total replacement at no cost to you for defective products, we'll make an exception in your case. Therefore, we have enclosed a voucher for a new TravelerXtra smartphone that you can take to our store nearest you.
    Type your improved opening sentence here:
15. Write an internal E-mail (Chapter 4):
    Note: This is the e-mail that was assigned for you to prepare before taking the mid-term. Copy and paste your final copy in the text box below.
    a. Use the Radical Rewrite: Information E-Mail—Negative Announcement 4.1, on page 109 and write an email to employees.
    b. Read and follow the instructions from the Your Task paragraph, except there is no need to list five writing weaknesses.
    c. As stated in the instructions: Revise this message to avoid excessive wordiness and repetition. Also,
    d. Create a comprehensible subject line.
    e. Start with the main idea: scheduling interviews.
    f. Develop reader benefits, for example, why should the reader be interested.
    g. Make the interview dates and rooms very readable such as using a list or table.
    h. Use familiar, professional words.
    i. Fix any buried verbs, long lead-ins, and flabby expressions.
    j. Use short, clear sentences and paragraphs.
    k. Use the good writing techniques learned in Chapter 4.
    l. Use the requests (send me your ranking lists) at the end of your message where action items should go.
    m. Include an end date and reason for returning the ranking lists.
    n. Use a correct e-mail format. (See p. 4, Figure 1.2 Businesslike, Professional E-Mail Message and/or p. A-1, Appendix A Document Format Guide, Figure A-1.) (22 points)
    Write Your Email here:

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